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Many local languages today are dying out due to the rise of language like English. Is this a positive or negative development?

It is argued that the spreading of the most successful languages worldwide
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many nations' local languages. In my opinion,
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 outcome goes the positive side by bonding all the countries into
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 tongue and easy for an individual to work anywhere in the world.
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 with, the most pressing advantage of
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 change is that the English dialect could emerge as a universal speech which could help in the growth of all nations.
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 trend can prosperous trade between each other through easy communication which leads to thriving its economy.
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, the BBC ( British Broadcasting Cooperation) headline in 2021, revealed that 70% of worldwide countries introduced English as a major accent in all legal paperwork. which not only could help to flourish the
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 but
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 nation like India which has its own almost 20 different languages.
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, acquiring an international accent and leaving the local tongue behind can be helpful for both
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 and their people.
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 strengthening the view of positive development is that any individual from any nation could be able to work anywhere. To explicate, If
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 trend were enforced in all countries, any individual could go all over the earth by avoiding any language barriers.
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, the newspaper "The Guardians" headline in 2022, found that students who come from any
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 in CANADA for studying, try to settle there
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 of going back to their home
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 because of
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 accent.
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, the
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 of
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 dialect
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 as English is contributing to joining the world in
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 nation. In conclusion, I believe that having people's
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 language would not only assist in the thriving of the
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's wealth, but
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 people can live their lives anywhere in the world at their convenience.

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