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In the 20th century, contact between many parts of the world has developed rapidly through air travel and telecommunication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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this
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improvement
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 of telecommunication and aeroplanes that make travelling and unity the
world
. There are many benefits and positive points about the development of
contact
 between countries, and
people
 of the
world
for example
 nowadays by developing cellular phones that are available we could easily get in
contact
 with
people
 who live on
anotherother
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another other
 side of the
world
 very easily and
also
 cheap. the same thing to air
travel
 we see that in recent years day by day with
developmentdeveloping
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development developing
air travels the amount of tourist increased rapidly at different points in the
world
 and there is
lot
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 of good
impact
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, for instance,
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for instance
 the most important
impact
 that it has is
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the economical
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economical
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 effect. even out the earth these days humans want to
travel
 and it helps all human beings to know better the universe
that is
 around us. On another hand there are a few bad things about the improvement of
people
's
contact
 around the
world
for example
 as we know right now it is much cheaper and a lot easier to
travel
 by aeroplane to other countries than 30 years ago,
this
 cause
the
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spreading of some dangerous disease like Covide 19 that cause deaths of millions of
people
, hurm very badly the economics of all the
world
 .... . As it is mentioned above one of the
reason
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reasons
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 that
contact
 between the
world
 has
improve
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improved
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 is social media,
internet
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the internet
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 and cellular phones beside good things it has
also
 some
harmfull
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harmful
impact
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impacts
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 on
socity
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society
,
for
instance
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,instance
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 these days
people
specially
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young
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the young
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 generation prefer to just talk and spend
thier
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their
 times with
thier
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their
frineds
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friends
 through social media that cause breaking of the warm relation
people
 had before. As we all know everything has some good and
also
 bad
impact
 but
at
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 my sight of view and in my idea
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the benifits
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benifits
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benefits
 of
development
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the development
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 of
contact
 between
people
 through social media and
travel
 is more than
it
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its
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 disadvantages.
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