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In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some pople might not be happy to give up using cash?

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As new technologies have been invented, those new technologies have changed the life of the current society in various ways. Especially, some
people
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 believed that payments by
cash
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 will be terminated soon by being entirely replaced with cards or mobile phones. In
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 essay, I am going to talk about prospects regarding
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 issue and what kind of problems can be caused by
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change
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. First of all, I assume that
people
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 are going to switch the entire
payment
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 method from
cash
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 to
card
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 or mobile phones in the near future. The first reason for
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 movement is that it can reduce the possibility of fake bills or coins.
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, Chinese
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 already
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 mobile phones to pay for things everywhere because the current government of China recognized a severe issue regarding fake bills.
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, it might solve some problems with tax exemption. Sometimes,
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 does not need to be included in revenue, and some
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 take advantage of it.
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,
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change
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 will bring more convenience to our life because we don’t need to carry
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 to pay for something.
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, I do not think that everyone will be happy with
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 kind of movement. For the elderly, especially, it is more difficult to adapt to the new method of
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. It is obvious that elderly
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 who are very vulnerable to new technology will have difficulties because of
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.
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, when smartphones came out into the world, my grandmother had difficulty using the new phone. For
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 it takes more than 2 months to learn how to
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 it. She can still
use
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 the basic functions of the smartphone. In
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 regard, it will be challenging for the senior
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 to
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 the new kind of method for daily
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.
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, It appears to be inevitable that new types of
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 methods will dominate the world, terminating the
use
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 of
cash
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. That’s because it can reduce the possibility of fake money, solve some problems related to tax, and especially, it will bring more convenience to our life.
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,
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change
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 may cause difficulties, especially for elderly
people
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 who are not familiar with new technologies.
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