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What are the pros and cons of advertisements. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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At present times, advertisement screens can be seen anywhere in the megacities and, it is irrefutable that,
ads
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 play a crucial role in the markets and among the citizens. There are multifarious pros of advertisements with
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drawbacks of cons.
This
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 essay will augment my standing and provide a logical conclusion. At present times, with the advancement of technology, every company want to promote their brands among the public, owing to the fact, companies
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heap
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 of
money
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 to spread the information about their
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 so that
people
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 can come to know about the bells and whistles of
products
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 and they willing to buy those items that are illustrated in the
ads
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. To cite an example, recently Samsung launched their A1 galaxy phone with dual cameras and they showed that the camera is comparable to iPhones. So the majority of folks bought the Samsung phone by the influence of
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.
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 one study, Samsung company gets profits
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 one million from citizens.
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, every garden has weeds,
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similarly
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ads
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 have
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 some drawbacks.
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, if there will be more
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 about the new
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then
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 it can waste the
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 of the masses at some point because there are hundreds of things that are launched in the market in the second or third month, because of
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, when
people
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 watch
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, they get excited to try new
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,
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,
people
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 spend their
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 on those items even they still do not need them in their life.
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, companies spend too
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profit
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 on
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 because sometimes they want to launch their brands with the help of celebrities, and
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 time, they pay high
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 to them. In a nutshell, Advertisements ought to launch among the public so that,
people
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 can know about new
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 but it's
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 the responsibility of
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the masses
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that
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they should buy new
products
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 if they really need them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intrusive
  • Omnipresent
  • Culture of consumerism
  • Materialism
  • Unrealistic standards
  • Self-esteem
  • Targeting strategies
  • Privacy invasion
  • Psychological manipulation
  • Overexposure
  • Decision fatigue
  • Conscious
  • Informed choices
  • Biased
  • Mislead
  • Critical sectors
  • Repetition
  • Environmental degradation
  • Throwaway culture
  • Non-durable goods
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