The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
The line graph gives information about
travels
to Fix the agreement mistake
travel
and
the Correct word choice
apply
UK
between 1979 and 1999 and the bar graph illustrates the most famous states travelled by
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to by
UK
inhabitats
in 1999
It is Correct your spelling
inhabitants
clearly
that in 1979 Replace the word
clear
UK
populations Correct article usage
the UK
hade
significantly increase Correct your spelling
had
to
visitsChange preposition
in
abroud
Correct your spelling
abroad
countries
. However
a decade ago resident
of Fix the agreement mistake
residents
UK
population was not Correct article usage
the UK
journey
to Add an article
a journey
another
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another country
other countries
countries
. Also
many countries
humans hade visited UK
such
as Turkey
, Greece, USA, Spain, France
. Most
important thing Add an article
The most
this
graph so Add a missing verb
is this
France
populations are high level in all Change noun form
France's
countries
. Although
, Turkey
people are at least percentage
whole of states.
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a percentage
Firstly
UK
residents Correct pronoun usage
who go
go
to overseas Wrong verb form
going
countries
gain
Wrong verb form
gained
huge
pie in 1979, Correct article usage
a huge
also
overseas
population Correct article usage
the overseas
travel
to Wrong verb form
travelling
UK
suddenly Correct article usage
the UK
to grow
. Change the verb form
grew
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For anothers
Anothers
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Another
years
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year
this
action is gradually improve
and in 1989 Change the verb form
is gradually improved
sharply
surge Change the word
sharp
UK
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in UK
residents
journey. For the Change noun form
resident's
residents'
reason
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,reason
this
process was spark
by Wrong verb form
sparked
economy
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the economy
at
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in
UK
amoung
20 Correct your spelling
among
centrury
.
Correct your spelling
century
Secondly
most Add a comma
,Secondly
countries
are voyage to UK
and Correct article usage
the UK
specially
in 1999 Replace the word
especially
Turkey
, Greece, USA
, Spain and Correct article usage
the USA
France
governments inhabitants prevails
. Correct subject-verb agreement
prevail
Turkey
and Greece people just under 5 millions
, USA 4 Change to singular
million
milions
, Spain just under 10 Correct your spelling
millions
millions
and Change to singular
million
France
just above 10 millions
( approximately 12 Change to singular
million
millions
) have portions by Change to singular
million
visit
to Add an article
a visit
UK
.Correct article usage
the UK
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