The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
The line graph gives information about
travels
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to
and
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apply
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the
UK
between 1979 and 1999 and the bar graph illustrates the most famous states travelled
by
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UK
inhabitats
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inhabitants
in 1999 It is
clearly
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that in 1979
UK
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the UK
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populations
hade
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had
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significantly increase
to
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in
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visits
abroud
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abroad
countries
.
However
a decade ago
resident
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residents
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of
UK
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the UK
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population was not
journey
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a journey
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to
another
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another country
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countries
.
Also
many
countries
humans hade visited
UK
such
as
Turkey
, Greece, USA, Spain,
France
.
Most
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important thing
this
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graph so
France
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populations are high level in all
countries
.
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,
Turkey
people are at least
percentage
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whole of states.
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UK
residents
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who go
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go
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going
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to overseas
countries
gain
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gained
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huge
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pie in 1979,
also
overseas
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the overseas
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population
travel
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travelling
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to
UK
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the UK
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suddenly
to grow
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grew
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.
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Anothers
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years
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this
action
is gradually improve
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and in 1989
sharply
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surge
UK
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in UK
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residents
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resident's
residents'
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journey. For the
reason
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this
process was
spark
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by
economy
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the economy
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at
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in
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UK
amoung
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among
20
centrury
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century
.
Secondly
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most
countries
are voyage to
UK
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the UK
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and
specially
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in 1999
Turkey
, Greece,
USA
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the USA
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, Spain and
France
governments inhabitants
prevails
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.
Turkey
and Greece people just under 5
millions
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million
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, USA 4
milions
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millions
, Spain just under 10
millions
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million
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and
France
just above 10
millions
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million
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( approximately 12
millions
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million
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) have portions by
visit
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a visit
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to
UK
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the UK
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.
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