The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

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travels

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and

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the

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between 1979 and 1999 and the bar graph illustrates the most famous states travelled

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inhabitats

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inhabitants

in 1999 It is

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that in 1979

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the UK

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populations

hade

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significantly increase

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visits

abroud

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countries

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a decade ago

resident

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Turkey

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, Greece, USA, Spain,

France

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important thing

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France

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populations are high level in all

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Turkey

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people are at least

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whole of states.

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residents

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to overseas

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pie in 1979,

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countries

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in 1999

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USA

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governments inhabitants

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and Greece people just under 5

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millions

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( approximately 12

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, countries, turkey, france, millions with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

198 words

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