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bar chart illustrates the information about four different methods of waste removal

bar chart illustrates the information about four different methods of waste removal
The given bar chart illustrates
the
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information about four different methods of waste removal, which
is
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are
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 used in
Toronto
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,
Madrid
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,
Kuala
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Lumpur
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, and
Amman
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
landfill
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 and incineration are the two significant and
the
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most
well known
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of
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waste disposal in these four countries.
According to
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 the bar graph,
landfill
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 is heavily used in
Toronto
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 with more than 70% of usage
while
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Kuala
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Lumpur
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 is the least, which is approximately 16%.
Amman
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 is ranked in
the
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second place for using
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landfill
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a landfill
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 process. The percentage of using
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landfill
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a landfill
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 in
Amman
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 is nearly half of its waste disposal.
Madrid
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 is presented just under the
third,
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which is 29% for
this
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method
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. Another popular process is incineration; it is widely used in
Kuala
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Lumpur
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 with
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 ratio of 53%.
This
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 management is
also
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favored
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 for
Madrid
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 and
Amman
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 with the number of 40% and 39% respectively.
However
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,
Toronto
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 has an opposite trend, which is only 10% of usage.
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,
in
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Madrid
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 and
Kuala
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Lumpur
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 has an equal amount of recycling
method
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, which is slightly over one-fifth (22%).
Amman
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 is rated in the second with 10%.
This
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 reuse
method
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 is not commonly used in
Toronto
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; the data shows just only 8% of usage. For the composite, it is the least preferable process when compares to
other
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 three ways.
Moreover
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, the trend for
Madrid
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,
Toronto
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, and
Kuala
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Lumpur
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 is nearby to each other, which is just under 10%.
Amman
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 has the lowest number of selecting
this
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 composite
method
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, it accounts for just only 1%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words toronto, madrid, kuala, lumpur, amman, landfill, method with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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