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In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

#cities #control #design #construction #houses #people #style #house #areas
Actually
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cities
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city
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design
are
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 important for countries because that condition
represent
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represents
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 the
country
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country's
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 culture. Many people claim that
human
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humans
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 must be to build
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a home
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home
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homes
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 in
the
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a
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 personal
design
 as the ancient home
design
 in local areas.
This
 situation has a number of benefits
however
, there are
also
 some drawbacks as well, as now will be discussed.
A
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 first possible advantage is
house
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a house
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 beyond
for
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apply
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humans
,
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 so
that
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each family must choose
own
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their own
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style
 because that area is personal.
Moreover
 many countries have
own
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their own
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 culture and religion
this
 situation impact
cities
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cities'
city's
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beatues
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beauties
beaches
 and
nowdays
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nowadays
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 people want to
choosing
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choose
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old
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the old
an old
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design
 and that condition gives to the city curious more than another
then
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than
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most
of
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apply
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state protect old castle because
this
 is history.
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for
this
 reason
to
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it
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 attract many
of
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apply
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tourist
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tourists
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 every year and be
economy
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the economy
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 more
powerfull
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powerful
.
Nevertheless
, it seems to me that the disadvantage of
this
 is old
style
be
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barrier
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a barrier
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 towards new innovation and
state
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the state
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intend
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intends
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new
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for new
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design
 because that
style
is make
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is made
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easy
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it easy
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 nation life. Especially populations are
growth
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 continuously
in addition
 inhabitants need living
are
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apply
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for the reason the creating huge buildings in the
cities
.
For
example
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 researchers show
on
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in
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 the article in " New York Times" old
style
 to damage for
generation
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generations
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 of humans. In the
meantime
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 if each person will create
own
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their own
his own
her own
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 personal
design
 that situation to break
construction
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the construction
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 of
cities
. In conclusion, each
style
give
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gives
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 beauty on town but many
of
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apply
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people choose the newest
style
 because
that is
 the best way for improving. I would hope
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the old
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old
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old-style
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style
conservative
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is conservative
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 and
transmit
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 next generation.
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