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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line graph depicts Underground
Station
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 passenger numbers in London on one day at different times. The time range of the figure is from 6:00 am to 10:00
pm
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.
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, 8am and 6pm are
passengers
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 peak hours, there are 400
passengers
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 in London underground
station
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 at 8am, and ~380
passengers
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 at 6
pm
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.
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, the least frequented times at London underground
station
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 are 6 am and 4
pm
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, there are only 100
passengers
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 in the
station
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. Looking at the trend of the figure. There is a period of rapid growth and
then
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 a decline in the number of
passengers
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 respectively in the morning and afternoon. The number of
passengers
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 rapidly grew from 6 am to 8
pm
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 and
then
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 reduce from 8 am to 10 am.
While
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 in the afternoon, the number of
passengers
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 grew from 4
pm
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 to 6
pm
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 and
then
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 declined from 6pm to 8pm.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words station, pm, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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