Having a good university degree guarantees people good job. a To what extent do you agree?

In
this
modern era,it is widely recognized that the majority of
students
are fascinated to do
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degree at
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university
.
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,studying at
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institute would bring a lot of jobs to the aspirants.I totally agree
about
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this
statement regarding
to
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the benefits of studying at
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college. To commence with,
in
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these days numerous
students
are trying to get
an
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admission
at
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well ranked
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university
,which would bring
huge
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number of advantages to them
such
as experienced professors,nice infrastructure and digital classrooms.
According to
the recent research of Oxford
University
on five-star rating
universities
,which they revealed that
the
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famous
universities
would give a plethora of
job
opportunities to their
students
.
For example
,
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university
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is
the
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one of the best
universities
across the globe,
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that
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college
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100% placements to their
students
since
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one decade.
Moreover
,if the
students
have that
university
certificate, a myriad of
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companies would give
good
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package to them and it assists them their entire life without any
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problems.Even though
,
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the
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good
university
plays a significant role across the globe,
but
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it is difficult to get
a
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admission
in
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that
well ranked
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universities
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. On the other side of the coin,only 5% of
universities
are
five star
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ratings,remaining 95% of educational institutes are below 5% ratings.So,it is very difficult to get admission in that
fame
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university
to the
students
.
For example
,in
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India,
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most of the
students
are completing their graduation at
lower ranked
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universities
, but they would get
a
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good employment at various organizations.Because
,
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not only they got good marks but
also
they are good at
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communication abilities.
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,the
universities
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seats are so
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,
so
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only a few young aspirants
to
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get a chance to study in those institutes.
To sum up
,studying at
fame
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a
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university
would
be
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brought good degree,it
aids to
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would
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bring a ton of
job
opportunities
to
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them
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.What is more,that
university
certificate guarantees to get a
job
and their life will be
settleted
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settled
and
thier
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their
life will be filled with
lot
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of joy and happiness.
In these
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days, getting a good
job
is so difficult in many nations,so if we have good
degree
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degrees
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and
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they would directly give placements to the
students
.
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