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Having a good university degree guarantees people good job. a To what extent do you agree?

#university #guarantees #people #job
In
this
 modern era,it is widely recognized that the majority of
students
 are fascinated to do
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a master
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master
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 degree at
fame
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a
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university
.
However
,studying at
famous
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 institute would bring a lot of jobs to the aspirants.I totally agree
about
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this
 statement regarding
to
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the benefits of studying at
good
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a good
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 college. To commence with,
in
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 these days numerous
students
 are trying to get
an
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admission
at
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to
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well ranked
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well-ranked
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university
,which would bring
huge
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a huge
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 number of advantages to them
such
 as experienced professors,nice infrastructure and digital classrooms.
According to
 the recent research of Oxford
University
 on five-star rating
universities
,which they revealed that
the
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famous
universities
 would give a plethora of
job
 opportunities to their
students
.
For example
,
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Hardware
university
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 is
the
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one of the best
universities
 across the globe,
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and that
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that
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 college
gave
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has given
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 100% placements to their
students
since
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for
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 one decade.
Moreover
,if the
students
 have that
university
 certificate, a myriad of
multi national
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 companies would give
good
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the good
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 package to them and it assists them their entire life without any
job related
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job-related
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 problems.Even though
,
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the
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a
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 good
university
 plays a significant role across the globe,
but
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 it is difficult to get
a
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admission
in
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 that
well ranked
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well-ranked
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universities
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university
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. On the other side of the coin,only 5% of
universities
 are
five star
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five-star
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 ratings,remaining 95% of educational institutes are below 5% ratings.So,it is very difficult to get admission in that
fame
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university
 to the
students
.
For example
,in
India
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India,
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 most of the
students
 are completing their graduation at
lower ranked
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lower-ranked
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universities
 , but they would get
a
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good employment at various organizations.Because
,
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not only they got good marks but
also
 they are good at
english
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 communication abilities.
Furthermore
,the
universities
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university's
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 seats are so
limit
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,
so
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that
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 only a few young aspirants
to
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get a chance to study in those institutes.
To sum up
,studying at
fame
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a
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university
 would
be
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bring
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 brought good degree,it
aids to
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would
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 bring a ton of
job
 opportunities
to
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them
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.What is more,that
university
 certificate guarantees to get a
job
 and their life will be
settleted
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settled
 and
thier
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their
 life will be filled with
lot
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a lot
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 of joy and happiness.
In these
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These
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 days, getting a good
job
 is so difficult in many nations,so if we have good
degree
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degrees
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and
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they would directly give placements to the
students
.
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