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A balanced diet, or eating balanced meals, is the key to a healthy life. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#diet #meals #life
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As an increasing number of
people
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concerned
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 about healthy
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life
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, it's interesting to analyse the role of a
belanced
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balanced
diet
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. It's hard to deny that there are a lot of ways could improve
people
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's health,and
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 a fact leads some
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 to generate the opinion that eating balanced
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 is not the key to a healthy
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. In my personal view, I strongly hold that a balanced
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 is
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key to creating
human
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 healthy
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. First and foremost, eating balanced
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 could help our
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 obtain what they need
nutrition
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 and vitamins. As we know, most
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 prefer junk
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 to healthy
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 since junk
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 tastes more delicious. But most
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junk
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the junk
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food
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 is deep-fried
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 with a lot of species for more flavour.
Junkjunk
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Junk junk
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 makes
people
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 feel satisfied but is not good for
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body
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. We
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 need vitamins from green vegetables and fruits. To be more specific, a balanced
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also
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 could balance the
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's health. Eating balanced
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 is slove the most of health issues. For example, if someone
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is getting sick
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 the hospital. The doctor
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 will give
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 some meal advice except treatment. Because
balanced
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a balanced
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diet
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 could help our
body
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 condition get recovery sooner.
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, a voice arises that doing exercise
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 is the key to a healthy
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. In my opinion, fitness
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 plays an important role in a healthy
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. But if
people
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 only focus on doing exercise
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 of a balanced
diet
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,
it
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 will waste the
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's effort
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 they trained in the gym before.
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Due to balanced
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meals
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 could help
people
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 keep their muscles.
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, it's still not a healthy
life
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 if
people
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 keep training every day but they
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 drink alcohol every day. In a nutshell, there are various methods to support
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's healthy
life
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. But a balanced
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 is normally considered
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the most important part of a healthy
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. There is a famous quote "we are what we eat", I believed that if
people
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 could understand what is necessary and needed for our physical and mental,
people
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 will make the correct choice to choose healthy
life
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
  • Vitamins and minerals
  • Proteins and fats
  • Chronic diseases
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Obesity
  • Mental health
  • Cognitive function
  • Omega-3 fatty acids
  • Healthy weight
  • Calorie intake
  • Overeating
  • Energy levels
  • Physical performance
  • Stronger immune system
  • Illnesses and infections
  • Variety of foods
  • Long-term health
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