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The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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A glance at the charts provided reveals the
consumption
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water
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 for different purposes in 6 major
part
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 of the world.One noticeable point
that
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highlighted
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 by the figure is that
,
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the
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water
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consumption
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 in agricultural
area
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constitues
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constitutes
 a great portion of
water
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consumtion
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consumption
 in most
of
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the
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countries.
According to
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 the graph,the percentage of
consumption
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 of
water
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industrial
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 sector
North
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america
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 and Europe has striking similarities in their trends with 48% and 53% respectively.
Water
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consumption
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 in other countries is between 7% and 12%. As it is clear,the amount of
water
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consumption
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agricultural
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the agricultural
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 part
are
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 partially much bigger than
other
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 parts with
biggest
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 pattern
with
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 88% in Central Asia and at
the
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 minimum of 32% in Europe.
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,domestic
use
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 in these
contries
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countries
are
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 less than industrial
use
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 or agricultural
use
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.South
america
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,Europe
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and
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and
amd
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and
 North
america
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 are the biggest consumer of
water
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 in domestic
use
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 with 19%,15% and 13% alternatively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, water, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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