The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
A glance at the charts provided reveals the
consumption
of
water
for different purposes in 6 major
part
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of the world.One noticeable point
that
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highlighted
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by the figure is that
,
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the
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water
consumption
in agricultural
area
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constitues
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constitutes
a great portion of
water
consumtion
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consumption
in most
of
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the
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countries.
According to
the graph,the percentage of
consumption
of
water
in
industrial
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sector
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america
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and Europe has striking similarities in their trends with 48% and 53% respectively.
Water
consumption
in other countries is between 7% and 12%. As it is clear,the amount of
water
consumption
in
agricultural
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part
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partially much bigger than
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parts with
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pattern
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88% in Central Asia and at
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minimum of 32% in Europe.
In addition
,domestic
use
in these
contries
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countries
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less than industrial
use
or agricultural
use
.South
america
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,Europe
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and
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and
amd
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and
North
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are the biggest consumer of
water
in domestic
use
with 19%,15% and 13% alternatively.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, water, use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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