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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company or organization. What might be the cause? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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These days many
people
 like to run up
the
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 business so, some
people
 think
that is
a
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 best way to
by
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be
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 rich,
while
 others believe
that is
 a big problem when
people
 like to be self-employed.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, being self-employed is a fast way to be rich, but sometimes you can not make good
money
 for your life.
For example
, when
people
 start
the
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 business they need
money
 to start and open a
company
 so, that's why some think
that is
 disadvantageous when you lose
money
.
On the other hand
, working for a
company
 or organization is good for keeping your
money
 safe.To illustrate, when
people
 work in a
company
 they take
money
 every month.
Hence
 that belief is good for employees.
In
addition
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 working for a
company
 or organization is make
people
 not care about many.
For instance
, when employees
works
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 in the
company
 the salary is stable not like self-employed everyday
money
 effect by
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the economic
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economic
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.
This
 proves clearly
that
is
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work in the
company
 is good for employees. In conclusion, after analysing both points of view, I believe working in the
company
 is good for
people
 who need
stable
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a stable
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 salary. In the end,
people
 can do anything to change life for the better.
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