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Some people say that olympic games do not have any role to play in society. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

#people #olympic #games #role #society
The issue of
play
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 a
role
 in some famous
world
 competitions has turned into a significant problem in
this
 century. some
people
 believe that
Olympic
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the Olympic
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games
 do not have an important
role
 in our
society
.
on the other hand
, some think that
world
 competitions can have an interactive effect on the community.
i
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 completely disagree with
this
 idea and the following essay will explore both sides of the
arguments
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. First and foremost, no one can ever deny the significance of famous
world
event
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events
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 like
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the olympic
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olympic
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games
 in
the
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society
. in
this
 way, certain groups of
people
 believe that
,
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 that type of
competitions
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 have
many
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 worse effect on our community.
for instance
, imposing a financial burden on the countries and the governments should
to
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tackle the issue of that.
in addition
, the interactive effect
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 just for special groups of
people
 in
the
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society
. to put it more simply, that type of competition
are
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 designed just for specific
of
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humans. Some might believe that
,
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 presenting the country and the culture of that
society
 in the
world
 by just holding the
olympic
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Olympic
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games
 is a simple way for the government authorities to show off themself in the
world
. Generally, holding that type of competition
have
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 a significant
role
 for that country. take ,
for example
 , increasing the job position for
the
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young
people
and
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it caused
the
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happiness in the community dynamics.
To sum up
,
i
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 believe that
Olympic
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the Olympic
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games
 have an important
role
 in our
society
. and it reflects the power and culture of that country.
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