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Speaking more than one language is important these days. Hence, children should start learning a second language during school time. Do you agree or disagree?

#language #children #second #school #time
In
this
 world,
language
 is the simplest way to communicate with each other. There is a discussion about that it
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 crucial to learn
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 kind of languages and it should
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 from school. I totally agree with
this
 notion and I will discuss
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this
 in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with benefits of multilingual person. The first and foremost is that
,
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in
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these days
number
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 of individuals like to study
from
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 foreign nations. So if they already have knowledge about the
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 of other
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. It would be easy for them to survive there. They can take admissions and easily find jobs for their livelihood.
Moreover
, people like to travel a lot. They visit other countries as well.
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, if
tourist
 guide would aware
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 distinct languages,
firstly
 they can help
tourist
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tourists
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 and
also
 can earn more for themselves. To exemplify
this
, India is a diverse country. majority of
tourist
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tourists
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 from all around the world visit here to see
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place
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places
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 and numerous
tourist
guide
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 would use own
language
 of tourists to make them comfortable.
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result
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,
this
 way they grew their business as well.
Furthermore
,
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 of individuals believe that
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 generation would forget their own
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 and culture with
language
. They will
also
 refuse to impart their nation's rituals and values to their children and
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 they lost their culture.
However
, if
this
 old generation understands the importance of learning another
language
, they will
also
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 tradition will never remove from
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heart
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.
Moreover
,
in
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these days,
English
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language
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at
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 every place, like
at
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 studies, work interviews and in technology
also
.
To conclude
, it is fruitful to become bilingual and multi-lingual. As it helps people in different sectors and rise their knowledge.
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