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More and more people think there is no need for printed paper newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #paper #newspapers
If we search the internet, we can find that today a lot of people
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believe
 that there is no need
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 printed
paper
newspapers
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However
, some people still
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 and prefer old
newspapers
. It has some
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esthetic
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 your chair and read some news, not from your phone, but from
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Also
, elders
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 printed news
instead
 of using computers to find out what is happening in the world. In
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addition
 reading from
paper
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 in front of the screen.
On the other hand
 printed
newspapers
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 wood for production, which in
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our days
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nature is already
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suffocating
 because of the
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pollutions
pollution
 made by humanity. So if we will refuse to use and
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paper
newspapers
 we can improve
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the enviroment
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environment
environmental
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 for a bit. Even my grandparents have smartphones now, so they can easily forget about
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paper
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nature. My thought is that state about worthless
newspapers
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totally
 right. We can stop using them and it will be only for
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. Indeed
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wasting
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 of materials
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 because the future is by digitalization. In conclusion, I can say that moving forward and getting rid of printed
paper
newspapers
 is a good idea. Of course, not everybody will like it, but I think it's a smart move, focused on saving and improving our planet. It's a small step, but at least it's something.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • printed paper newspapers
  • digital news platforms
  • tangible reading experience
  • replicated
  • disconnect from technology
  • focused
  • immersive
  • accessible
  • elderly
  • archival source
  • preserving historical events
  • local news coverage
  • advertising opportunities
  • small businesses
  • convenience
  • instant updates
  • valued
  • completely replaced
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