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The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the number of book rental services that one British library (Malton Town Library) had given, in 2009.
Overall
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, favourable seasons happened in the middle of the year
while
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 renting numbers fluctuated in the second half of the year. Interestingly, the least rent month occurred in the first months,
in contrast
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 to the
last
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 month of the year when it soared up to its highest point. In the beginning season, borrowers of books 10 to 7, especially hitting the lowest point of six in February. The following four stages (April to July) increased in numbers but relatively remained steady between 13 and 15. The
last
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 months had some dramatic fluctuating results, especially between August and September, the number of people who rented books suddenly dropped from 20 to 12. In the following month, it rose , only to drop again to 9 in November. Surprisingly, in December, book renting plummed to its peak of 21, almost doubling up to 45%. In conclusion, the library rent peak season happened between April and August.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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