LOGGING OF THE RAINFOREST IS A SERIOUS PROBLEM AND MAY LEAD TO THE EXTINCTION OF ANIMAL LIFE AND HUMAN LIFE. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

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raw materials is a serious issue
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of logging
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the rainforest
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is one of the most important
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action. In my
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argument is altogether correct.
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, logging of the rainforest destroys many
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' natural habitat and restricts their precious
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, some of the rare bird
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can only live in a tropical climate which is provided by rainforests. Other temperatures above or below
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normal lead to damage
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circulatory systems.
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, some climate activists point
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most of the oxygen
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athmosphere
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, which is necessary for life, is provided by rainforests. It is true that
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people prepare
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dooms-day
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with
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irresponsible actions
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and depletion of raw materials.
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, decreased level of oxygen may lead to irreversible respiratory diseases
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as lung cancer and COPD.
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, uncontrolled human actions can have
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impact on both animals and humans.
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, logging of the rainforest and depletion of resources would be proper examples for
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argument. In my point of view,
deforestation
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may lead to
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of some animal
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and human life.
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, people should aware of the health problems related to logging in
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long term. In conclusion,
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due to
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logging is a serious problem because of the consequences on human and animal life. I
am totally agree
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with that brief result which is highly important for all
species
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