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The best curriculum is not one based on a static body of knowledge but one which teaches student to cope with change. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#curriculum #body #student #change
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In some perspectives, it is better to cultivate
students
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 with the ability to tackle
changes
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 in the real
world
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 than stick
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 the
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 in the textbook. Despite the fact that academic
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 could enhance performance in schools, I agree that the acquisition of capacities to deal with change is more important. On the one hand, textbooks provide a systematic education allowing educational institutions to quantify the performance of
students
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 regarding their learning progress. To ensure
students
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 have good scores on tests, the majority of teachers tend to stick to the official teaching material, even though the information is outdated. Take English courses in many Asian nations as an example, what
students
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 learn in the classes is no longer used by native speakers, in another ward, the
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 they gain in the courses has no practical usage in the real
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, to remain
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 in a competitive position, it is more important to provide curriculums to prepare
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 for
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 fast-changing
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.
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 of focusing on static
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 from traditional teaching sources, it is better to apply the latest information with modern technologies to provoke the ability to deal with
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, many private educational institutions tend to improve their means of teaching by training teachers to combine the
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 in textbooks with the latest information to ensure
students
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 are able to cope with the
changes
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 in the
world
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. 
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, it is inevitable that the acquisition of academic
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 is essential for
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,
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, people should pay more attention
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 education which could prepare young individuals to face the
changes
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 in modern societies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • necessitates
  • adaptability
  • problem-solving skills
  • static knowledge
  • unforeseen challenges
  • technological advancements
  • emerging industries
  • critical thinking
  • lifelong learning
  • change-oriented curriculum
  • traditional vs. modern educational approaches
  • flexible learning environment
  • globalization
  • cultural diversity
  • change management skills
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