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Some people think that young criminals should receive the same punishment as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every story has two sights and justice equality for both immature and adult criminals is not an exception. Many
people
 hold the opinion that juvenile delinquents deserve to be put in justice under the same rules as mature felons. Those who disagree point out that young offenders can be rehabilitated, unlike older criminals. We must acknowledge that criminals, regardless of their age, are a potential threat to
society
. Some
people
 even consider young felons to be more dangerous
due to
 their bad habits picked up in the prison.
Therefore
,
for example
, light punishment or early releasement from imprisonment will not serve its purpose to keep
society
 safe.
In addition
, most
people
 doubt in rehabilitation system for underaged felons.
Although
 it is hard to compete with the above arguments, some
people
 disagree with negativity toward juvenile delinquents.
In particular
, the defenders of the argument believe that young
people
 are not mentally and physically fully developed.
Therefore
, they do not acknowledge the consequences of their actions.
For example
, teenagers raised by pathological families, lack knowledge about social norms and acceptable behaviours.
In addition
, there is a prospect for them to be rehabilitated and taught how to live in
society
 without committing more crimes before they reach adulthood. In conclusion, both aspects have some benefits and drawbacks, but I believe that young
people
 who stepped on a bad road, should be given the opportunity to reinforce good habits in order to live peacefully in
society
.
Submitted by asiasemik on

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