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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature and history of their own coun- try, rather than the literature and history of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #children #literature #history #coun- #countries
History
 is
the
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 important part of every
nation
, as it
help
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 to connect their citizens to the past.
However
, there is
discussion
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a discussion
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 between masses about pupil learning, that the need to know only about their own country
history
 rather than others. I am partial to
this
 notion and I will discuss
about
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this
 in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
background
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the background
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 of other continents can be beneficial in distinct ways. First and
the
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formost
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foremost
 is that it
help
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helps
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 to connect people with each
one
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other
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. To
illustrates
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illustrate
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this
, many youngsters move
to
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abroad for their higher studies or work experience. So, it
become
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 easy for them to indulge in
new
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a new
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 environment
beacause
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because
 they already learned about
new
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the new
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 country's past and
litrature
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literature
. They knew
that
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apply
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how folks live
their
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, what are their eating habits and
connection
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their connection
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 with others
etecetra
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etcetera
.
Moreover
, if anyone even does not want to go
foriegn
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foreign
nation
, still students can grow with the help of
litrature
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literature
 or
history
. Sometimes there
are
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 some information in past details, that can be helpful in future.
On the contrary
, own land
history
 is much more vital for
new
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a new
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 generation.
Firstly
, if
person
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a person
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 does not have knowledge about their own
history
, how that
indiviual
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individual
individuals
 can connect with their past
.
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 They do not feel something about that and don't give much importance to
this
 as well. Despite
this
, these people never support their
nation
 in difficult circumstances.
Thus
, own
nation
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nation's
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history
 could help to
nation
 grow
as well as
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the indiviual's
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indiviual's
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individual's
 growth.
To conclude
,
although
 it is perfectly said that
past
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 of
nation
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a nation
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 is significant,
while
 not only
own
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its own
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 but other
continents
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continents'
continent's
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 background is
also
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the pivtol
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pivtol
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pivotal
pistol
 of youngsters. Because
,
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 it
help
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 students to grow in other countries
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