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increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
In
this
 modern era,it is widely recognized that the majority of people have been facing a huge amount of
issues
 from noise and air
pollution
.
However
,certain
section
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 of individuals think that
rising
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raising
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 the price of petrol would reduce the
traffic
as well as
 different kinds of
pollution
 consequences.I partially agree
about
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this
 statement .In the forthcoming paragraphs and
eventually
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i
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 will clearly provide measures and reasons. To commence with,there are
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a
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numerous reasons to increase the
traffic
issues
 across the globe.
Moreover
,the significant reason is the growing popularity of usage of cars and other mode of
vehicles
.
Additionally
,an increasing petrol rate is not only the solution to curb the various problems.
Government
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 should do awareness programs and campaigning in
the
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public places,which would bring
plethora
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 of benefits to
the
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society.First of all, they can understand the pros and cons things about
usage
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the usage
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 of more
vehicles
 on the roads.For instance,in the UK
authority
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authorities
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 established
a
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new
kind
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kinds
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 of rules and regulations
such
 as if citizens
are used
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use
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 cars for long distances,they should pay road tax to the
government
 and that would control the using of
own
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their own
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transport
 for long distances.
Instead
,they are going to
use
 public
transport
 for larger
distance
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distances
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such
 as buses,trains and flights.Which assists
to
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decline
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reducing
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 the
pollution
 and
traffic
problem
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problems
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.What is more,a myriad of residents who are facing health
issues
such
 as chronic diseases and cancer across the world.
Despite
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,lawmakers should take effective measures to control
the
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traffic
 and air
pollution
,
otherwise
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otherwise,
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 many masses will
be
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face
a
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plenty of health hazards in the coming future.
On the other hand
,
ther
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there
 are a ton of reasons there to upward the
traffic
issues
 in these days.
Due to
 many people are liking to
use
 own
transport
 for work and travel purpose.
For example
,in the USA citizens have been using cars
for going
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 to the
work place
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workplace
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 and
there
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they
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are not
felling
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feeling
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 comfortable
to
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use
 public
transport
 to go anywhere.Because of if they
use
 public
transport
 and it would take a huge amount of time to reach their destination.
In addition
,they can travel during night time
also
 to
diffrent
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different
 locations.So,it is very difficult to
use
government
vehicles
 at night time.
To sum up
,
Government
 and
environment
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 experts should take
a
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apply
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measures regarding
to
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the latest
issues
 from vehicle
traffic
 and
pollution
.They should start a 24 hours public
transport
 and
increasing
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 the
electronic
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number of electronic
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vehicles
,which would assist the entire society.
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