The line graph shows the average prices of tickets sold at a theatre and the bar chart shows the average percentage of tickets sold in 2010 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustratesaverage prices ofthe price of a ticket was about 9.5 pounds until the next quarter
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ticketswhich were Sold at a theatre.
Whilethe bar charts display the average proportion of
ticketsthat were sold in the year 2010 and 2011.
Overall, it can be clearly seen from the blue printer that the prices of
betweenthe given Period of time.
However, the percentage of
ticketswhich were bought by people fluctuated over two years. on the one hand, in the first quarter
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thisprice was steady. But, after that in ,Q3 it reached its peak with almost 10.5 pounds for each ticket.
Furthermore, the price was constant for the Upcoming few quarters which was 10.5 pounds. but it fluctuated
at the endof the period.
On the other hand, the percentage of
waspurchased by the public was about 60% in the first quarter and it remained constant for the next two quarters.
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,in Q4 the proportion of
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ticketspurchased for theatre reached its highest which was almost 70%. But, In the upcoming year
thispercentage dropped dramatically to 20% Eventually, in the next two quarters namely (Q3, and Q4) once again it increased gradually to just above 60%
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