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Some people think that the government should provide free public libraries in every town, while others think this is a waste of money because people can get access to information on the Internet. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Books
 are an important part
in
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 the development of society. They are written to save the history of humans so going to public libraries is the easiest way to access any
books
 we need. But some
people
 hold a belief that the
Internet
 can provide us with as much
information
 as
books
 in
the
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libraries. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and consolidate my opinion about the necessity of public athenaeums. At first sight, we all know that
books
 are the one thing that can be used to save the knowledge about Maths, Literature, History and Geography,...
People
 wrote down on
papers
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paper
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 whatever they saw or imagined and described wherever they came or how they felt and after that, these written things were copied and printed more to help
people
 easier access and read them. But
books
 have
such
 a high price that few
people
 can afford to own many
books
 in their house. So that the government should provide free public libraries in each
neighborhood
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 to help more
people
 access many different book categories. A free public library can
also
 become a quiet place for
people
 to do their work. But
due to
 the development of
Internet
 services,
people
 are more confident to search
information
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for information
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 on the
Internet
 or ask any question they want on any social network platform. So some
people
 think that the
Internet
 is more helpful and cheaper than
books
 to get
information
.
Moreover
, they
also
 think that looking for something in
books
 is more difficult than looking for it online because they need to find the right book and
exact
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 page in
this
 book to get what they want to know. In my opinion, both
books
 and the
Internet
also
 have their advantages that help
people
 feel comfortable when using each of them. In my opinion, reading
books
are
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 not only finding
information
 but
also
 reading about the world,
people
 and many other nice things and
this
 is an interesting activity when we need to relax or take a break.
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