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Natural resources are being used at an extremely high rate. What problems can it cause how to solve them

The development of technology and government services is led to a vast amount of the usage of environmental resources at an elevated level. The main reason for
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the consumption of natural sources unwisely by rural area residents and a viable solution is to change
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 of life. The number of people owning fertile lands increases year to year, with most
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families
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 now having more than
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earth
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. Most citizens, who are not specialized, prefer to support fruit and vegetable cultivation rather than buy them, so they try to grow food for one season.
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 lack of water.
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people
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planty
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plenty
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 around their houses
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 is uncultivable, but they attempt to make these lands productive by wasting a great amount of water and energy without noticing that it costs more money than purchasing them. A solution
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 proving successful in many areas is substituting
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 of living.
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persuading the population of
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 to move to urban areas. Because it is necessary to perceive that our natural resources will not reach the next generation by engaging in
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 they should act to work which is beneficial and does not damage the environment, so
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 who is living now should consider the measurement of proceedings. The government has to protect the conservation territories from large companies which are organizing constructions in
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affecting
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biodiversity. In conclusion, even though improper and excessive use of natural resources can cause serious environmental issues, they can be solved by
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 of innovative approaches.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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