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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who use internet every day from 2003-2006.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who use internet every day from 2003-2006.
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The chart represents the proportion of adults with various
age
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Great Britain who
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used
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Internet
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the Internet
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 daily between 2003 to 2006.
Overall
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, the highest
used
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 of
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internet
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were
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 among
young
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the young
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age
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group
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 compared with the other
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 groups and the lowest
usages
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 were elderly
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. First of all, in the chart the
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group
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 of 16 to 24 young adults had used
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internet
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 the most by the
year
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of
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2005 with
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100 % before that, it has been used
same
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 ratio 80% in 2003 and 2004 respectively. But it dropped by 10% by the
year
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 of 2006. In the meanwhile, the
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 of 25 to 44 adults had a gradual
increased
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 from 50% to 80% approximately by the
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 of 2003 to 2006 respectively and
also
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third
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group
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with
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the
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 of 45 to 54 there
were
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 similar upward trend with almost
same
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the same
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 percentages which means
the
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both groups had constant percentages without any changes.
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, in the
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 2006
was
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the highest
peck
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used
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 of
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internet
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 by the
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group
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 of 55 to 64. Before that
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 they had little fluctuation and they remain under 36% around. At the
last
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group
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 of people with
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age
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 65+, they used
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internet
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the internet
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lot
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a lot
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 less than any other
group
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 as
compare
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 to 3 years they
had
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used
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internet
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the internet
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 20%
all
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together which is
lowest
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the lowest
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 use of
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internet
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, internet, group, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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