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Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers.

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Over time entertainment
activities
 undergo changes.
Besides
,
in
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apply
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most times is related to trendy
activities
 that are popular among
people
 not really
people
’s interest. In my opinion,
this
 trend really happens in the majority of societies. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will show my thoughts in more detail. It is my view that
firstly
, from an interpersonal standpoint, most of the youth who live in a particular era are enthusiastic to show off their recreational
activities
.
Furthermore
, they are willing to do really trendy
activities
although
 often they are reluctant to do them.
Secondly
 from a social viewpoint, in most developing countries
people
 via social media become aware of other
hobbies
 that their peers in other developed countries do.
Consequently
, they become interested to do these
activities
 without really being keen on them.
Finally
, at the same time with progressing technology
people
's
hobbies
 have changed.
In contrast
, some
people
 claim that individuals do entertainment
activities
 that are big fun for them. They firmly insist that trends and fashions do not affect their interests.
However
, I do not find
this
 argument convincing as we live in a world where the majority of
people
 like to compete in several criteria. One of them is their
hobbies
. They tend to brag about their indoor and outdoor
activities
 in spite of their real interests.
For example
, most
people
 are aware of the consequences of playing video games and mobile games but just mimic other
people
 doing these
activities
. In conclusion, I completely agree with
this
 idea that
people
's
hobbies
 are changing and most times a reflection of trends and not the real things that
people
 like it because
people
 typically adore to adopt themselves with new things just to show off
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