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Poor countries always received money from rich countries , this approach unable to address the poverty issue so according to some developed countries ought to provide different type of aid rather than financial support. In my opinion, I agree that rich countries supposed to not give financial assistance to poor countries as there are many types of support available to help assist them.

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According to
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 it means that
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 might
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 to
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 emotionally stable person who is well-balanced and generally satisfied with the way their life is going. It probably can be a
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 of a politician or a diplomatic official. I find
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 illegible
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 is why I suppose that the owner of the
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, I may assume that
this
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 the same signs in
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 speaks of obsession
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 action and thoughts,
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strong habits and
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the ability
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 to easily cope with monotonous work. And
finally
, the given
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 has a large size. Graphology interprets
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 as a sign of a self-confident person.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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