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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams depicting a college
sports
 centre give information about its inner structure at
this
 stage and proposed changes for the future. Currently, a swimming pool of 25m in length is located at the centre, with a reception in front of it facing the southern entrance. On the western and eastern sides lies a changing room and s seating area for the entertainment of the audience and the preparation of athletes. On the northern edge, there is
also
 a gym which is projected to extend behind the seating,
while
 others regions mentioned above remain unchanged in the future plan. Stepping out of the main building, one can visit two outdoor courts situated on both sides of it at present,
however
, these sites are expected to be removed to give way to indoor activity rooms and entertainment facilities. In order to satisfy the diversified needs of students, another pool designed for recreation is likely to be constructed on the left of the original changing room, with another one added next to the pool and a small-scale
sports
 store. Another change that can be seen from the diagram is the possible addition of a
sports
 hall and two dancing area in the east, being equipped with a changing room and a cafe for brief breaks.
Overall
, the
sports
 centre retains its basic function after redevelopment,
although
 the outdoor facilities will be converted into indoor entertainment.
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