Some people say that the best way to improve Vinsers’ health is by increasing the number of sports facilities at VinGroup/Vinhomes locations. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health at those sites and that other measures are required. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
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In Vietnam,
public's
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public
health
is one
of the most controversial topics that being
taken care of by the Add a missing verb
is being
health
government. To improve the health
of Vietnamese people, the health
government demands local authorities as well as
real estate organizers to come up with the
solutions to maximize their citizen's Correct article usage
apply
health
. One
of the biggest real estate oganizers
in Vietnam is Correct your spelling
organizers
Vingroup
with over 50 modern urban neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
lie
throughout Vietnam. To take care of Wrong verb form
lying
this
problem, Vingoup
came up with solutions by creating the most Correct your spelling
Vingroup
convinient
for their customers to Correct your spelling
convenient
do
exercise and encouraging their Unnecessary verb
apply
citizens
to do it more. Firstly
, Vingroup
has been improving their infurstructure
by Correct your spelling
infrastructure
buiding
more public Correct your spelling
building
sport
facilities Change the noun form
sports
such
as tennis courts, swimming pool
, basketball courts,... Fix the agreement mistake
pools
as well as
create
more green field areas Wrong verb form
creating
such
as green parks. By doing this
, more and more citizens
can access to
those Change preposition
apply
ultilities
Correct your spelling
utilities
site
and build good habits for their Fix the agreement mistake
sites
health
. Secondly
, Vingroup
has been trying to create more fasinating
activities Correct your spelling
fascinating
such
as running day
, tennis tournaments, Fix the agreement mistake
days
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and sportdays
sportdays
to encourage their customers to improve their Correct your spelling
sport days
sports days
health
. However
, an assessment from the public health
government show that, eventhough
Correct your spelling
even though
Vingroup
's efforts to increased
Change the form of the verb
increase
overall
Correct article usage
the overall
health
of Vietnamese people, the
public Correct article usage
apply
health
still remains the same. This
problem is supposed to the
lack of participation of their Add a missing verb
be the
citizens
and no changes in their eating habits. Eventhough
, their customers increased their time in attending Correct your spelling
Even though
sport
activities but their time attending is still low Change the noun form
sports
due to
living far from their work. In addition
, one
of the most things that affects
Change the verb form
affect
the
Correct article usage
apply
health
is eatting
Correct your spelling
eating
habit
, their Fix the agreement mistake
habits
citizens
are not change
it because they refer Change the verb form
are not changing
fast
food more than healthy Change preposition
to fast
one
because
their lack of time. In conclusion, Add the preposition
ofbecause
Vingroup
has been trying to improve the Vietnames
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Vietname's
Vietnames'
overall
health
, but their
Replace the word
there
are
more Correct subject-verb agreement
is
need
to be done to Fix the agreement mistake
needs
archieve
for that goal.Correct your spelling
achieve
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