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The bar charts below describe the weekly hours worked by people in four Scandinavian countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below describe the weekly hours worked by people in four Scandinavian countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 chats compare how much time people worked per week in Denmark, Norway, Sweden, and Finland in 2002. It is obvious that 35–40-year-old
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 were the major workers in those countries,
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 all 1-14 age
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 certainly seldom worked in 2002.
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 with, it can be seen that the highest
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 hours weekly
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 were 35-40 years old, particularly in Norway 35–40 age citizens spend
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 time on
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 weekly at 48.1%.
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, 1-14 age
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 were the lowest
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 to
work
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 per week in 4 countries, and these ages were the smallest workers at merely 3.2% in Sweden. We can see that the percentage of
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 hours weekly in Sweden and in Norway had similar patterns in 2002, in which the second-highest
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 were both above 41 ages, around 17%
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, and the third populations were 21-30 ages.
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, the above 41-year-old worker group was the lowest at only 9.6% in Denmark.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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