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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart illustrates the average amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 released by a person ( in metric
tonnes
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) in 4 different European countries over the 40-year
peiod
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period
 of
time
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. The X-axis shows the
time
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 period from 1967 to 2007
while
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 the Y-axis gives data on the quantity of
carbon
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dioxide
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 emitted. In the United Kingdom, the CO2 emission decreased gradually over the
time
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 period
whereas
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 in Portugal and Italy,
a
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 significant growth can be observed up until the year 1997 and after that emissions remained almost at the same level in the following 10 years. In
sweden
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Sweden
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,
Carbon
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dioxide
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 release showed an upward trend from 1967 to 1977 when it peaked,
then
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 it declined continuously over the next 30 years.
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However
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 out of all 4 countries, the UK was the largest CO2 emitter during the given
time
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 range which was closer to 11 metric
tonnes
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while
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the
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Portugal was the least contributor which was about 1 metric
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tonnes
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tonne
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 in 1967. In 2007, both Sweden and Portugal emitted an equal amount of
Carbon
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dioxide
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 which was around 5.5 metric
tonnes
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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