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the graph compare the number of train passengers and percentage of train running on time from 1995 to 2004.

the graph compare the number of train passengers and percentage of train running on time from 1995 to 2004.
the graph compares the
number
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 of
train
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passengers
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 and the
percentage
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 of
trains
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 running on
time
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 from 1995 to 2004. it is clear that in 1995 ,the amount of
train
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passengers
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 was the lowest meanwhile the accounted of
trains
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 running on
time
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 was the highest. the
number
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 of
train
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passengers
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 in 2001 was the highest, but the
percentage
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 of
trains
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 running in 2000 was the lowest . the figure for
train
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passengers
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 increased gradually from 250 in 1995
million
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 to 265
million
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 in 1999.but the
percentage
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 of
trains
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 running on
time
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 declined significantly from 94% to 86% from 1995 to 1997 and increased to 94% from 1997 to 1999. from 1999 to 2002, the
number
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 of
train
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passengers
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 increased dramatically to 300
million
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 ,but the
percentage
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 of
trains
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 running on
time
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 declined rapidly to 85%.from 2001 to 2004 the
number
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 of
passengers
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 falling to 280
million
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 in 2002,and
then
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 keep steadily in the
last
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 3 years,
by contrast
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 ,the accounted for
trains
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 running on
time
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 showed a downward trend to 74 %.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, train, passengers, percentage, trains, time, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • train passengers
  • train punctuality
  • on time
  • trend
  • period
  • significant changes
  • growth
  • decline
  • correlation
  • contrasts
  • milestones
  • economic conditions
  • infrastructure
  • transport policy
  • customer satisfaction
  • implications
  • prediction
  • environment
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