Some people say that the best way to improve Vinsers’ health is by increasing the number of sports facilities at VinGroup or Vinhomes locations. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health at those sites and that other measures are required. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion

There are several ways to improve our Vin inhabitants' public

health

. One of them is increasing the number of

sports

facilities to promote

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participation.

However

, some argue

this

solution would be not as effective as other

measures

,

such

as encouraging playing

sports

at

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available sites. Each approach has its merits and demerits;

therefore

, they should not be overlooked. On one hand, expanding the number of

sport

-specialized sites will encourage

people

to participate in

sports

.

This

is because

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such

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and

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city like Hanoi, it is difficult to find a suitable gym

that is

well equipped

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with new and modern

equipments

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equipment

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.

In addition

, the distance should be taken into consideration since a decent

sport

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complex might be sometimes out of reach for many

people

. By constructing new

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facilities, the exposure to

sport

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buildings will increase;

therefore

, more

people

will engage in

sport

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activities to improve

health

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their health

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.

Moreover

, new

equipments

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are safer,

hence

preventing users from getting unwanted injuries from broken machines.

On the other hand

, considering the circumstance of Hanoi as aforementioned, empty space for construction becomes scarce.

Consequently

, the

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of

sport

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facilities is not feasible without proper urban planning, especially dedicating a part of the urban area as a

sport

-focused district. which is demanding and time-consuming.

Therefore

, alternative solutions might

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immediate superior efficacy in

this

case.

For instance

, those alternatives include encouraging

people

to participate in

sports

at

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available stadiums or holding outdoor marathon competitions to reduce dependence on stadiums. All of

those

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solutions above are cost-efficient and equally beneficial. In my opinion, I believe any

measures

can be applied given that we have

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labor

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force and land for construction. New stadiums will be notably significantly beneficial

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long run

as well as

improving the city's aesthetics.

In addition

, alternative

measures

will show their effects immediately and

last

for a long time. A perfect approach should be a combination of these

measures

.

To conclude

, there is no single best way to improve Vinsers's

health

. To improve Vinser's

health

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, many

measures

must be taken as a whole for synergy to reach

their

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maximum

potentials

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