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37 Some people think that the government should provide free public libraries in every town, while others think this is a waste of money because people can get access to information on the Internet. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
 believe that making a public environment for
people
 who want to read
books
 in
libraries
 is really important,
therefore
, another statement said that the fantastic way to find out something is the internet.
This
 essay will illustrate both sides and give my opinion. On the one hand, establishing free
libraries
 is beneficial for poor
people
 and students. Both need
books
 to achieve their dreams. If
people
 are educated
then
 they are able to get a job that can give them a good lifestyle. All these are possible if they get a free book that can only provide through the library and cannot access at any cost.
Secondly
, many traditional and historical
books
 are only available in the library. These kinds of
books
 are not accessible in ordinary bookshops.
On the other hand
, the Internet plays an important role in human life. Almost everything is available on the Internet so citizens can find pieces of information quickly in a short period of time.
For instance
,
instead
 of going to
libraries
 and wasting time finding
books
,
people
 just have to click the button to receive what they want very easily. In conclusion, I think that
libraries
 are not a waste of money, and actually are very important in today's life. From my point of view,
although
 nowadays
people
 are getting used to being familiar with modernization and innovation in
the
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life, I suppose that it is much better if the government can keep traditional habits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public libraries
  • physical and digital resources
  • community hubs
  • educational and cultural activities
  • tailored information
  • literacy and lifelong learning
  • costly
  • urgent social needs
  • vast amounts of information
  • readily accessible
  • digitalization
  • under-utilized
  • inefficient use of public funds
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