Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when they buy new things whereas in the past, old things were repaired and used again. What factors cause this phenomenon? What effects the phenomenon leads to?

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,
people
always throw
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old
things
away when they buy new
things
,and in the past, old
things
were repaired and used again.
one
the
one
hand,there are some reasons caused
this
phenomenon .
firstly
,
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think
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because
nowdays
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people
living
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in
the
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advanced
wrold
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world
and all
things
around
people
are develop
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fast.
people
need to buy new
things
to follow the social
improvmemt
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improvement
,if they still use the old products that
people
will
left
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behind .
secondly
,the average income of
people
become more and more
,
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so that
people
can afford to buy some high price products.
finally
, some old products can not
used
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be used
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nowdays
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,
therefore
people
need to buy
new
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thing
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to
replaced
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the old
one
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ones
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.
on the other hand
,there are some effects
the
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phenomenon,
firstly
, it
lead
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some
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environment
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environmental
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issue,
people
always throw
the
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old
things
away and it caused resource waste .
secondly
,
people
always buy new
things
instead
repaired old
one
,
i
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think it will form a correct consumption concept,and
also
these phenomenon
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this phenomenon
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also
influence next generation.
finally
,it may
caused
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cause
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people
be
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too materialistic . in conclusion.there are several causes of
this
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situation
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