Some people believe that students work better if the teacher is strict; others think it is better for students, if the teacher has a friendly approach. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

There is an ongoing debate
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whether teachers should be strict enough or warm enough to get higher performance from the
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. From my perspective, I think a moderate approach would be more effective to get a better result. In the forthcoming essay, I will explain both viewpoints.
To begin
, teachers are respected people. They are not friends in terms of hierarchy.
In addition
, strictness is needed to get the students disciplined. Class decorum promotes some set of rules and regulations which can be maintained thoroughly by a
teacher
. In
this
way, he can control the mischievous students and
also
the ones who are disoriented.
Therefore
, the ultimate goal of learning can be accessible.
For example
, I was more focused when my
teacher
's attitude was tough toward me.
In contrast
, a friendly environment offered by a
teacher
makes his students more productive. They ask about their shortcomings in the lesson and get solutions from the lecturer more promptly.
Thus
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.
For instance
, in high school, I was weak in math and my math tutor was so friendly that I asked him all the questions where I
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hard, but he
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it easy.
As a result
, math became my
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subject. In conclusion, by considering the above facts, it is reasonable to be a strict
as well as
friendly
teacher
.
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balancing the two characteristics will be more fruitful. In my opinion, a
teacher
should act as a modest person who can balance both natures which is most functional.
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task response advice
Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the prompt and presents both viewpoints effectively. However, make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and provide a balanced discussion of both views.
coherence and cohesion advice
Your essay shows good organization and coherence, with a logical progression of ideas. To improve, use more transitional phrases to improve the flow of your writing.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • disruptive behavior
  • academic expectations
  • sense of urgency
  • perform to the best of their abilities
  • real-world environments
  • rules and deadlines
  • approachable
  • nurturing learning environment
  • participate actively
  • ask questions without fear
  • reprimand
  • interactive and engaging
  • effective learning
  • stressful learning environment
  • lack of respect and discipline
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