The diagram illustrates the basic principles of a hydraulic dam.The process includes a large dam,powerhouse and long distance power line

The diagram illustrates the basic principles of a hydraulic dam.The process includes a large dam,powerhouse and long distance power line
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram illustrates the basic principles of a hydraulic dam.The process includes a large dam,powerhouse and long distance power line
The diagram gives information about the
faundation
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foundation
priciples
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principles
of a hydraulic dam. The process involves a large dam ,
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power house
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powerhouse
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and long
interval
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through by line.
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, it can be seen that
a
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apply
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hydrelectric
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hydroelectric
power
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generation main source of
the
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developing countries. The process has five
stage
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,
that
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starting is sluice gates and
at the end
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the
electric
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pass into cables.
Firts
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First
of all, the sluice gates are stock
water
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,
then
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water
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through it by the dam,
then
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using penstock , reach
to
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the turbine. The
procudure
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procedure
is divide
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is divided
is dividing
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two
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into two
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ways,
first
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,first
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the turbine is started to spin
next
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the next
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level is that spin is causing to create electricity.
Second
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level is residual
water
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to pass
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passing
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a narrow tunnel ,
latter
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later
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the
water
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spill
ot
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out
on
to the downstream outlet. In the final
stage
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the turbine is creating
electric
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electricity
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by
generator
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the generator
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, so
this
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is
assemling
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assembling
assuming
into the
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power house
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powerhouse
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, next stage the transformer is starting to transmit to the
power
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transmission cables.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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