It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

making
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recognize the difference between
right
and wrong at
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age is important. In order to help them learn
this
distinction,
punishment
is necessary.
However
, In my opinion,
while
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that
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children
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how to differentiate
right
and wrong is significant, I disagree that helping
children
learn it by punishing
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necessary. I accept that it is important to make
children
realise the difference between
right
and wrong at
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age, it
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to ensure that our society is safe.
For example
, more and more youth crimes appear in our life. A large part of them
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care and education from family, school and so forth. They don't know whether what they are doing is
right
or wrong, and what the price they pay for doing it
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If there have someone to help them learn what is
right
and wrong when they are
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children
, they may not commit.
On the other hand
, it is
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extremely crucial to help
children
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a better
way
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only
punishment
is not an effective
way
to teach
children
, but
also
it
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a negative influence
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children
. Teaching by punishing may make
children
think
punishment
can deal with many things
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so that they use the same
way
to do other things when they grow up.
This
will slowly become the
punishment
being the only
way
to educate, rather than reasoning and so on, which will cause damage
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society.
To conclude
, it is essential for teaching
children
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the difference between
right
and wrong. In the short term
punishment
is a
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teaching
way
for
children
learning
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this
distinction. In the long term
punishment
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will
bring great damage to society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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