The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates world sales of the top five smartphone brands over a
period
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of 4 years from 2009 to 2013.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that
Nokia
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reached the maximum at the start of the
period
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until the next two years, which was replaced by Samsung
at the end
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of
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period
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the period
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time given. In 2009,
Nokia
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reached a peak of around 440
,
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and fell gradually
at
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to
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250 in 2013. In 2011,
Nokia
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also
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got a maximum
around
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of around
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430 and followed by Samsung
around
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at around
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330
then
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Apple and LG
about
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at about
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98.
While
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ZTE was the lowest
brands
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brand
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just around 51.
Moreover
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, Samsung experienced a sharp increase and reached a peak of 450, followed by
Nokia
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in 2013.
On the other hand
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, Apple
was
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the
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climbed dramatically and was the highest
from
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among
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the remaining three others brand. Apple stood at 150
at the end
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of
a
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the
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period
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time given.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, nokia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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