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Human beings should find new ways to live with climate change rather than prevent it from becoming worse. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Climate
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 raises more and more questions as to whether it is better to find new
ways
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 to adapt to
climate
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 than to prevent it from
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, in my opinion, I believe that in the short
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 it is definitely better to look for new
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 to adapt to
climate
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. But in the long
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,
people
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 should
also
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 be looking to protect the
climate
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 for the better. They are both very important. I accept that it is important to find new
ways
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 to adapt to
climate
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People
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 need to respond more quickly to
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 in order to ensure that our livelihoods are secure.
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, in some European countries, the heat has caused many
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 to die in the summer. But
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 would not have happened if new measures had been executed,
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 as sprinkling water on city roads, increasing the number of trees in cities, etc.
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, it is
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 extremely crucial to prevent the
climate
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 from getting worse.
People
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 have a great influence on the
climate
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. If we don't
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, the
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 problem will get worse and worse until we can't survive.
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, a large part of the global warming problem is caused by using our cars, which produce a lot of carbon dioxide. If we use more clean energy cars and public transport, we will alleviate
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 problem and
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 reduce our impact on the
climate
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, it is essential for us to find new
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 to adapt to
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prevent the
climate
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 from getting worse. In the short
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 we need to respond quickly to the effects of
climate
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 to protect our livelihoods. In the long
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 we need to find
ways
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 to reduce our impact on the
climate
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 and repair it.

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