The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows how much
fish
and
meat
(
chicken
,
beef
, and lamb) were consumed by the average person in a particular European country from 1979 to 2004 in grams per week (
gpw
Correct your spelling
gw
).

Overall
,
consumption
of all types of
meat
declined with the exception of
chicken
, which showed a steady increase in popularity.
Chicken
replaced
beef
as the most popular
meat
,
while
fish
remained the least consumed throughout the
period
. At the start of the
period
,
beef
was the most popular
meat
, with over 200
gpw
being consumed by the average person. At the same time,
consumption
of
chicken
and lamb stood at about 150
gpw
,
while
that of
fish
was much lower, at 60
gpw
Correct your spelling
gw
.
Thereafter
, individual
chicken
consumption
rose steadily, finishing the
period
at 250
gpw
,
while
in contrast
, personal demand for
beef
and lamb saw consistent declines, despite
beef
peaking at around 240
gpw
in 1984. By the end of the
period
, their respective levels of
consumption
had fallen to around 100 and 60
gpw
Correct your spelling
now
. With regard to
fish
, it was the least popular at all
times
Fix the agreement mistake
time
show examples
, falling from 60
gpw
eaten by a typical person in
this
country in 1979, to 40
gpw
in 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, meat, chicken, beef, gpw, consumption, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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