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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of high school students having part-time jobs. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples.

#school #students #jobs
In
this
 concurrent era,
work
 is a necessity of life. There is a discussion going on, that many
pupil
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pupils
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 like to do
temperory
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temporary
work
along with
 their studies. I will discuss both merits and demerits of
this
 notion in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with the pros of
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the part
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part time
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part-time
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job
. First and foremost is that children would become independent. To elaborate
this
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on this
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,
students
 generally
work
 with their
education
 just for money. They need any source of income to
fullfil
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fulfil
 their needs.
Due to
 that they become independent and achieve their wishes
according to
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that. To exemplify
this
, many migrant
students
 in Canada and Australia do part-time jobs for their college fee and their
livlihood
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livelihood
. They complete their needs by themselves.
In addition
, youngsters
also
 gain some experience with that. Every
job
give
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gives
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few
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a few
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 skills to
individual
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the individual
an individual
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 that would help in future as well. They can use that experience for upcoming jobs or businesses.
However
, there are some cons of
temperory
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temporary
job
also
.
Firstly
,
this
 can put
negative
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a negative
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 effect on
education
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the education
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 of
students
. Because
,
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apply
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 usually learners spend their maximum time at
work places
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workplaces
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 to earn more. They do not give much attention
toward
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to
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 their studies.
Thus
,
in
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as
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a result
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result
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,result
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 they do not achieve good grades in their exams.
For instance
,
according to
a
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research, pupils who do
part-time
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the part-time
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job
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jobs
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 with their schooling receive bad results in
education
 than others. Despite
this
, high school
students
 are at their
pubirty
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puberty
 stage. If they start working at
this
 age they cannot enjoy
with
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themselves with
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 their family or friends, as
this
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these
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 is
there
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their
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 precious days of life that they can
utlize
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utilise
 with them and make some memories for them. So
this
 would
lost
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be lost
lose
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due to
work
.
To conclude
,
although
work
 would be important for some. But, it can
effect
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affect
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 the
education
 of
pupil
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pupils
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 and
that is
 much more important
that
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than
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 anything.
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