Children can learn effectively by watching television. therefore, they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school.

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health. one evident negative to have
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after that the
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and dislike
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in future. In conclusion, I believe that the methods of
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that can help
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to
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get more knowledge and will not
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their health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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