The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The flowchart depicts all the necessary steps in recycling
aluminium
cans
. Those processes will be divided into two crucial steps: compressing and recycling the items. The whole production
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started with the collecting of old
cans
in the trash
cans
,
spesifically
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specifically
aluminium
cans
garbage. Before
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processed
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further
, those
cans
need to be cleaned and sorted to filter any contamination.
Furthermore
, after
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sorted
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, those goods need to be shredded and compressed by recent technologies in the factory. In the subsequent stage, the resulting old
cans
need to be heated to produce some melted
aluminium
goods. Afterwards, the melted
cans
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processed by rolling technologies which have 2.5 mm - 6 mm thickness, resulting in the
aluminium
recycling that can be spread out and used for the consumers. Based on the experiments, 74% population in the United Kingdom reuses recycled
cans
which is one of
alternatives
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to solve waste management in the country.
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