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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university.  What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
A recent trend among young diplomates has been on the rise,
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 of them take the
decision
 of undergoing a gap
year
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study
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 comes with a legion of different benefits and downsides. Personal growth
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 of time and the risk of never going back to
study
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. Is there a right
decision
? To start with, the positive aspects of a break between high school and the beginning of university courses could be the possibility of reappraising and
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 in order personal ideas on one's future plans.
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 any kind of rush on
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hindsight believe that if they had taken a
year
 to free their mind after
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On the other hand
, starting to work and so generating
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 might turn one's focus hindering their personal will to advance
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 the academic field. Indeed, a
study
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 has recorded how 1 out of 5 students allegedly on a gap
year
 once interviewed later on stated that had never come back to
study
.
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 second place, many consider a
year
 off just a
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 of time because if you are really interested in pursuing an academic career the first rule is not to waste time today because exams themselves will help you in doing so hardening your path.
To conclude
, in my
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 there is no
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right
decision
 over another. What is important is just to take the leap thinking about it with no external influences
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 keep on studying or
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 a
year
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