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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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The
map
giving
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gives
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 information about
development
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the development
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 of
village
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the village
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Chorleywood
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of Chorleywood
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in
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from
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 1868 to 1994.
Overwive
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, Chorleywood is a village near
by
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apply
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London.
In
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From
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 1868 to 1883 it
consiste
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consisted
a
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of a
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small village area. In
addision
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addition
 new railway and motorway
system
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systems
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added
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were added
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in
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apply
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to
present
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the present
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map
,
because
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and because
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 of that more populated
area
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areas
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 progressing. The Chorleywood park and Golf course
situated
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are situated
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inbetween
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in between
between
 roads. Two main
road
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roads
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 are goes
through
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from
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 north to south and west to east
in
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on
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old
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the old
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map
. In 1909 new railway
parth
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path
 opened and it goes
to
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from
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west
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the west
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 to
east
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the east
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 side. In near to north to south main
road
 station
stablised
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stabilised
established
. New motorway
built
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was built
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 in 1970. The population areas mainly started in 1868 to 1883 near
main
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the main
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road
. It
is
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gradually increased
in
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from
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 1883 to 1922. All the places
are belong
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belong
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 to the
road
 system.
In
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From
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 1922 to 1970 new
comersial
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commercial
 area develop
in
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on
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the south
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south east
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south-east
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 side of the
map
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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