In the last century when a human astronaut first arrived on the Moon he said: “It is a big step for mankind”. But some people think it makes little difference to our daily life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the emergence of rocket technology,

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begin exploring other planets.

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they start sending missions to

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a waste of taxpayers' money.

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can not go and begin to live there,

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the amount spent on these projects can be utilized to facilitate the general public or can be utilized on research programs that are beneficial to society.

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, resources used by these agencies can be used to address more important issues that are linked to the lives of the earthlings. For ,example global warming is a pressing problem and the government can utilize these resources to minimise the greenhouse effects by investing in green energy like solar and wind projects or they can invest in research to create economical cancer treatment.

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, it is undeniable fact that stepping on the moon is a big scientific achievement and it was advertised by many news sources of those days, some claims that

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achievement will be benefiting us in the near future when humans start a new life there when

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mother no more bear the burden of us. But I am not seeing

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happening in near future. In conclusion, these kinds of projects don't have any significant effect on our lives unless they resolve the challenges faced by mother earth. If they failed to do so

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in my point of view it is a waste of money and resources which can be used to make

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In the last century when a human astronaut first arrived on the Moon he said: “It is a big step for mankind”. But some people think it makes little difference to our daily life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Computers and A.I. technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society?

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to university, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree ?

Topic : Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others believe that individuals also can do some things to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.