Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

Technology
is changed
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the limit of interaction level between
people
. Alteration of communication through
technology
also
affects types of
relationship
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relationships
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. It is true that there are both positive and negative
effects
of
this
alteration. In my opinion,
negative
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the negative
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effects
are overweight
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postive
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positive
effects
.
This
essay will discuss
about
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dramatic
effects
of
technology
on human communication and relationship.
Firstly
, social
media
and dating
websites
are developed with
techonogy
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technology
which are giving
opportunity
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the opportunity
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for
people
to talk with strangers,
even
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and even
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dating
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. There are so many friendship and dating options available, thanks to social
media
.
In contrast
,
mostly
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people
should make friends
with
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step by step.
Also
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people
don't hesitate to listen
each
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other on
socail
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social
media
which has
poor
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impact on
a
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conversation. Listening is different from hearing and the concept of communication should contain both
of
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the
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actions.
Secondly
, dating
websites
are changing the meaning of relationships. Normally,
people
need
a
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time for understanding their
expectation
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expectations
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, realities and hobbies, but these
websites
demolishing the fundamental barrier between these understandings.
Moreover
,
people
can't stand each
others
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other's
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physical appearance or behaviours. Before the internet, a man and a woman dating with each other in
a
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bistro's
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or
restaurants
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restaurant
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, but
knowadays
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nowadays
these platforms changed into mobile phone applications
such
as
Imessage
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iMessage
, WhatsApp or Tinder. In conclusion, with technological development, the way of
interaction
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interacting
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through
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different
people
is changed and developed into a different concept. In my point of view, social
media
and dating
websites
have a poor impact on human relationships.
People
should consider their different alternatives for dealing with
technology
.
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