Some people think that governments should spend public money on saving minority languages, Others, however, believe that would be a waste of public money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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the minority
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population is
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decrease
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from time to time. some
people
believe that governments should spend public
money
on saving
minority
language
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languages
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,
while
others believe that would be a
wast
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waste
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of public
money
.
This
essay will show discuss both
these view
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this view
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and give my own opinion. On the one hand, governments should spend public
money
on saving
minority
languages has several reasons. The
frist
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first
is that if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
helps
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the minority
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minority
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minorities
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,
minority
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the minority
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population will
diecrease
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decrease
increase
.
moreover
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thire
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their
culture is lost. Now society is
multicultural
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a multicultural
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society. So we have to need
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different
culture
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cultures
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. The
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second
is that
minority
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the minority
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has a lot of history. Mabey
minority
history is very important to
socity
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society
.
However
, we do not understand
minority
language
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languages
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. So if
minority
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the minority
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is lost, we can not get
minority
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a minority
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language
.
On the other hand
, others believe that would be
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a wast
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wast
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waste
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of public
money
.
This
opinio
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opinion
has several reasons. The first reason is that
minority
langiage
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language
languages
does not need in
socity
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society
because
minority
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the minority
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population is a few and
almost
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most
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people
cna not
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cannot
understand
thire
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there
their
lunguage
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language
. In
additon
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addition
,
minority
people
are not to work in
socity
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society
. They live
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mountains
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and so on. So if
minority
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a minority
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language
can not
undersatand
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understand
us, we do not have problems. In
counclsion
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conclusion
,some
people
believe
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
shoud
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should
spend public
money
on saving
minority
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minorities
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because they are
butifule
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beautiful
culture. So we have to save
thire
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their
language
.
While
others
bellieve
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believe
that would be a
wast
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waste
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of public
money
because we can not understand their
language
and they
are
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can not work in
socity
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society
. In my
oen
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own
opinion that if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
uses public
money
on saving
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the minority
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minority
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minorities
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, it would be a
wast
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waste
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of
publiv
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public
money
because if
thery
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they
there
are
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apply
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language
is lost, we do not have
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an affect
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affect
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on life and
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should spend
money
on
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another
other
things.
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Society
has a lot of problems and
their
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they
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need a lot of
money
.
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