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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'on ebig traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is ? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Car is very important for
people
 in the present year.
Also
,
cars
 are highly increased over 30 years in all places around the world. So, the growing number of
cars
 is affected by traffic jams. In my ,opinion I think that
cars
 can make traffic jams on road but everyone needs to use a car.
Therefore
, the government needs to focus on
this
 problem.
This
 essay will argue the benefits of using
cars
 and how to government discourage
people
 from using their
cars
.
First,
cars
 are things that make our life easier ,
for example
, families are using
cars
 for travelling and some families are driving
cars
 to go to work and sent their kids to go to school.
Secondly
,
cars
 are comfortable more than public
transportation
 like buses and trains.
Third,
some
people
 think
cars
 are safer than public
transportation
.
In addition
, many
people
 use their personal car because there can save time on travelling.
Therefore
,the proportion of
people
 who use
cars
 is very increased
such
 as some families have four to five
cars
 in their house like in USA and Canada where there have many
cars
 in their houses because
cars
 are very cheaper than in many countries.
However
, the increase in
cars
 can be affected
to
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 many problems
such
 as traffic jams. And it is very serious for many governments to think about it and it is a very big problem around the world that many governments try to solve
this
 situation
such
 as there must develop
transportation
 systems like clean
transportation
,
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and safe
transportation
.
Moreover
, there must get taxes for
people
 who have many
cars
.
To conclude
,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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